Clipping?
The tune itself kicks. But it's like no matering work went into it.
In a digital workflow, clipping is inexcusable. This is easily an 8 if you set EQ to your instruments and use a proper limiter.
Please clean this up! It deserves a 10, but this version doesn't make it!
to tell you the truth the only sound file that clips is clipping on purpose. at first it was an accident but for some reason the sound was clipping in perfect beat to the song so i kept it in.
Too much theme-riding
There's a little bit too much dependence on one phrase and one instrument-set. It doesn't come across so well.
The key for higher marks here is to up the number of sound types, how and when they appear, and especially -- use automation.
You can totally get away with dependence on one theme -- so long as the same theme never SOUNDS the same twice.
If you can morph, filter, and change-up the tune continually (which is a LOT of work!) there's no reason this can't have double the marks I gave it!
Rhythmic-Centric Goodness!
You got drums.
You got chord-glue.
You got tension out the wazoo.
You got a very nice game-tune going for you. It's repetitive, but the all the rhythm work you spent time on gives it that right to be. It remains a very nice groove loop after loop after loop...
Jam Session Personified
Nothin' wrong with a good jam session!
The trick here is it could be fleshed out into a "full" track, but right now it's a respectable bounce-around without needing to change a thing!
Half-themed, no coherant support
Your main melody and the drums later are this tune's best character.
Before that there's a bit too much dissonance and it's really difficult to "find" the feeling of the tune.
After that the track sort of 'coalesces' into something listenable, but breaking this tune into main areas, variations, and bridges might do it well.
This one's pretty far from being what it could be in terms of pure kickass, but the ideas are presented are admirable... just too ad-hoc.
MIDI-esque, good ol' days of gamin'
Sharp quantization and minimalistic approach with 'low-bar' sound-sets and a groovy, moving beat keeps a bit of tension and wonder flowing.
Absolutely a 'travelling' tune, headed towards the unknown.
This one might go under the knife again, but that would be just to experiment with arrangements a bit and to replace some samples/instruments. That's where the missing '5 points' in the Overall score comes from.
I'm absolutely sure it'll fit as-is into the right video track.
VGM BG Material!
That is, 'Video Game Music, Background Material'!
Another track with hidden potential that just needs to be brought to the surface.
This can be downright epic without a lot of effort!
However as it is it stands on its own really quite well, and the murkiness of the audio might be considered to this tune's benefit: The medium pace, 'jogging' feel to the bass, and progression sets this up to be a "thinking" game background with medium pressure and a countdown timer, or a boss battle of some sort.
Mastering Makeover -- Potential
This tune is a cross between some sort of club tune and video-game driven tenacity.
The only thing I can suggest is a re-mix and re-master. The tracks (individual instruments) seem a little 'squishy' and without quite as much character as they should have.
The overall impact of the tune can be MUCH greater with a few additional tools and work. There's so much hidden in this track that are covered up by superficial "errors" that the ears latch onto and won't let go.
Remaster this and repost!
Creepy, disjointed, and fun!
Not your average track!
Quality overall is nice and the minimalistic feel works really well.
Certainly not traditional feeling, either -- piano & drums with a lot of tempo-motion and with a sort of progressive feel and a really clever loop point.
The title fits the track, and implies some sort of crazy exploratory emotion. Good work!
Collaborate and Quantize!
Doing jam sessions on a guitar is cool and fun, but without any other instruments -- no percussion, and no way for your listeners to find a groove -- doesn't let the tune shine like it should.
Find some way to get a beat in there and play against the drums so your tune is steady and not just a collection of random-tempo clips!
But with all that said, you're on the right road to throwing down some pretty sick stuff. Your best bet is probably to get with another musician and collaborate -- I'll bet you can find someone to compliment your style and bring up both your popularity!
Looking forward to more --
Thanks a lot for all the suggestions, I see what you're saying as well, for this song it was more intented just to be basically random fills(hence the name cavity as in fillings...yeah me and my brother are probably the only ones that laugh at that). Yeah, hopefully we can find someone who would want to jam with us, thanks for the review again, we really appreciate it.
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